W11 Prac: From ‘bad’ to ‘good’

Woman freed from under Brisbane train

A women was freed from under a train at Eagle Junction Train Station in Brisbane at 12.55pm.

After becoming trapped just after 12noon, four fire crews responded to the incident.

A spokesperson for the Queensland Ambulance Services said the women has been transported to the Royal Brisbane Hospital in a serious condition.

“The woman is currently conscious but has sustained lower leg injuries,” said the spokesperson.

Train services have been impacted with delays of up to 40 minutes being experiences on the Airport and Doomben lines.

For more information on the latest train delays, contact Queensland Rail: 1234 5678.

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Author: Hil Sinfield

Business and professional communication specialist.

1 thought on “W11 Prac: From ‘bad’ to ‘good’”

  1. Hi Hilary
    From bad to good indeed this post is exactly what the original story should have been. Its short and to the point with all the information intact. You’ve broken up the story perfectly making each paragraph distinct and meaningful. Your incorporation of quotes is also brilliant.
    A Fantastic post keep up the good work.

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